Ryan in Year 10 came out with this gem of a description during one of our recent English lessons. Look out for his use of: prepositions, adjectives, simile and sentence variation!
Beggar
To the old lady’s right is a beggar. Desperately he tries to get her attention, he was crying out for money. He had a blue and black stripped hat, with a thick bomber jacket, blue jeans and steel toe capped boots.
The woman slowly approached him anxiously, he began to shiver, his teeth were chattering, his hands were shaking as he held a cup out to put money in. The money in the cup was clinking together as his hands shook. He was mumbling like a bear as he tried to speak.
He was anxious and very intimidated by the woman, but she felt the same way about him. She walked away.
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